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death will wait for me by ~watashi-kami-aikou:iconwatashi-kami-aikou:



i didnt stop for death
so he stopped for me.

the car held just ourselves
death and i.

together we sat
as cars drove by.

flashing lights, rainbow hues
stern through random holes.

ahh! i see why.
the glass is broken
were upside.

is that why this man is beside me?
is that why the sky is bleeding?
or maybe its mine
maybe im bleeding.

but no that cant be!
becuase hes sitting next to me!

without a scratch he sits
lips pursed in a smile
a lanky finger points.

i look of course
a flipped over car.
a paramedics
police... what is it?

hes taking me away from here.
good! i wish to be here no longer!

but? but wait! im screaming!
no! help her! shes dying!
my heart aches

i look at death
he whispers
"shes you"


then i see

that this pain this fear
was right in front of me.
©2007-2008 ~watashi-kami-aikou
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i cant even drive........ but i like the whole poem ^_^ sorry my poems are always dark and sad :(

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!Argent-Twilight:iconArgent-Twilight: Dec 23, 2007, 12:02:37 AM
I like it, but... Darlin', capital letters. ^^;

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"YOU ARE GOING TO HELL AND THERE'S NO WAY YOU CAN CHANGE IT! "-=Cheeko-001

"A clever person solves a problem. A wise person avoids it."
-Einstein.

"There's an evolutionary imperative why we give a crap about our family and friends." -House
~watashi-kami-aikou:iconwatashi-kami-aikou: Dec 23, 2007, 12:29:13 AM
aww thanks ^_^ ya i should probably go back and fix that ^^;

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!Argent-Twilight:iconArgent-Twilight: Dec 23, 2007, 10:16:59 AM
<3

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"YOU ARE GOING TO HELL AND THERE'S NO WAY YOU CAN CHANGE IT! "-=Cheeko-001

"A clever person solves a problem. A wise person avoids it."
-Einstein.

"There's an evolutionary imperative why we give a crap about our family and friends." -House
~watashi-kami-aikou:iconwatashi-kami-aikou: Dec 23, 2007, 10:41:05 AM
:hug:

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:ohnoes: anywayz~!!!!
"say what you will, but im taking the cake
=tedzerds21:icontedzerds21: May 20, 2008, 9:19:43 PM
I like how you turned it, the beginning reminds me greatly of Emily Dickenson's "Because I could not stop for Death" poem and you took it and made it something similiar but altogether yours. Nice! :thumbsup:
~watashi-kami-aikou:iconwatashi-kami-aikou: May 26, 2008, 2:31:06 PM
ive actually never read that poem before, and the title was so similar i looked it up. a fabulous poem but i never realized how almost identical the two beginings were :( but thank you i appreciate it :)

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=tedzerds21:icontedzerds21: May 29, 2008, 10:00:56 PM
You're welcome dear. :heart: